This was a nice way to praise God.

You are.. amazing.

I like the idea of something being there to catch you if you fall, expressed quite strongly in this poem. The impression of 'if you can't make it to the surface, just hold on to me and i'll lift you up' :) Religion is very good for inspiring poems, wouldn't you say?

i would love to hear this sung... it's ver worshipful and has lovely rhythm. very well done.

That was beautiful. I love how you show the reaching out to God after pain, the need for... something. And you aren't afraid to mention sin. Its funny how some people are so scared of that word, isn't it? I especially liked the line "Untie the constricting chains of my heart
To let rivers of emotion flow freely again" Very powerful emotional images, very true.

Awesome. It’s so perfectly done. I love the intensity in your work. Again, this reminds me of the Metaphysical Poets, this time of Edward Taylor’s “Huswifery” (I can mail these Metaphysical poems to you if you like). Maybe it’s the way you expand your imagery, calling to mind the “Metaphysical conceit”, an unusual, sophisticated and well-developed/ expanded metaphor. Taylor for instance wants God to make him into His spinning wheel and goes on to elaborate on the analogies one would not have seen before.
If I say this, I don’t mean that you are not original enough, on the contrary, I think you are highly original, it’s just some quality about your work that ranks it with those poets I’ve always admired most, so this is the highest compliment I could give you. ;-)

Excellent poem, masterfully written and true to every word. Spread the message and God Bless.
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Nice work, but I more like the end stanza the best.

Very neat! Nice concept to base this on.

~Lidless Eye

another inspiring and encouraging piece! fantastic!

Outstanding work as always, I think you are the best writer on FFpress. God Bless you always!

Needa S.

There's such truth in every piece that you write. This poem, specifically, speaks volumes! Splendid! :o)

brilliant beautiful imagery

Another intensifying poem only you could write. *claps*

It's so good!
I especially like,
"I cannot climb with such obstacles set
My strength long gone and eyes wept"
Your words are well chosen. I like how you described your pressure and despair in the beginning.
Keep up the good work!