umm, intresting, you seem to like to rhyme 'rain' with 'pane'... I don't think I've ever used that rhyme before.. intresting... opens up a very easy thing to rhyme with (content wise).. rain.. window pane... hmm, maybe this can help me finish a couple of old half-finished poems...
Anyways, intresting poem, like I said earlier... the last stanza felt out of place

*gasps* I love the rain! Definatly a good start to the poem!... Wow I'm hyper right now. Anyways, really good poem, I love it. The rain part and the "Pictures flashing in the thunder" part was cool too. Oh, and I can relate to the second to last verse, good job! Um, maybe you could call it as the rain falls or as the rain something something something... I dunno, anyways, good job, I like it

Keep writing

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Is "the storm in my mind" to cheesy?

I think it might fight or did I miss the point?