Fallen angels, hmm? Interesting.

oh! i had wondered what had happened to this poem. you showed it to me a while ago, over at your house...you hadnt finished it then. im glad you finished it up and posted it! i really really like this one!

OK, this has great imagry.

But, it can be even better!

You need to fix the rhyming scheme.

Also, and this is just to challange you, try counting the sylables in the lines. Yes, I don't do it either -- and here as long as they sound good, who cares?

But, you know, just for fun?
Yet this doesn't matter as much.

I like the sentiment and idea. Very clever and .. is the sun coming through the clouds?

I like the material - very interesting. I'm not sure if I understood why the second stanza didn't rhyme, but that's your choice.

Tenika Dargan

I like the comparison.