 avidelecteur 2003-10-30 . chapter 1I can tell you're doing something with the number of syllables per line or something, because of your choice as to how to word phrases, but I'm not sure exactly. I was most definately not expecting that twist at the end. I don't quite understand her/his feelings, why she's saying that. But it's a really interesting poem. Not all that lyrical, but for this content I think that's probably what you were going for. |