 CatClawz 2004-05-17 . chapter 1 interesting style, very clear |
 Kelpylion 2003-12-13 . chapter 1Wonderfully fantastical-the tone of imagining something fairly ordinary doing something impossible and magical-like flying!-is just so refreshing. It's great that an older (than me) writer can still have imagination. |
 Mystic Kiwi 2003-11-04 . chapter 1weird, yet good.
~Kiwi |
 avidelecteur 2003-10-30 . chapter 1Interesting vision. I wasn't really expecting that when you started describing the pin, I thought it would just be a descriptive poem. What's with the slash, tho? I didn't get that... Anyway, good job. I like it a lot. |
 katyruth 2003-10-29 . chapter 1lovely descriptions. i like the end line, it gives a good feel to the end of the poem. keep writing! |
 Miamouse 2003-10-29 . chapter 1I like this. Short, and sort of has a clipped, metallic feel- in keeping with the subject.
Keep it up, this is lovely.
Mia |