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| Ahemait 2005-02-08 ch 1,   | what can say? again i don't know. that's three times in a row, something very good indeed. the last line(s) are very good. poems are made even better with an amzing ending, such as yours. the only grammar mistake i find is in the first line:kLet my Spirit become the storm. you will have to fix that, but beside...it was still an amazing, i'm quite repeatitive, piece. |
| ShaeAndrea 2003-12-06 ch 1, | Oh my gosh that's beautiful! I loved it. I figured since you've read my poetry I would return the favor and I was not disappointed. This is a beautiful poem. |
| Ishuzu 2003-11-09 ch 1, | Ah... I can't believe I didn't review this one. This is one of my favorites but I still like the "her" poems. Oh and by the way... "Eleanor Rigby"- The Beatles and "Sympathy for the Devil"- the Rolling Stones? Have to say I'm impressed... |
| Miyabi-chan 2003-11-08 ch 1, | It was excellant! Thax for the review I didn't know anyone was going to review so quick! No one reviews my stories on Fanfiction! If you want to go on fanfiction.net and search under "Athena Godess of Wisdom." |
| Hershey249 2003-10-31 ch 1, | Wow...strong, very strong. I can't ignore the forcefulness, something comes through even if you try and just overlook it. Wow. Nice. Repetition really does the trick here. Congratulations, you've successfully written a meaningful and beautiful poem that doesn't rhyme. I applaud you. ^_^ Well, most of it doesn't rhyme. The last eight lines do. But I love the last eight lines, they bring the whole thing together and let it just linger there. The sudden rhyming in a poem based on repetition makes you stop and read them more carefully. Excellent stuff. |
| Aimee Raven 2003-10-31 ch 1, | Hey, this is really good...very deep, gives me shivers, good work! One question, lol, where does the name Victor come from if u r rob? lol, my stupid questions, dont let me bother u, lol. Thnx for reviewing my poem 'Golden Cage', lol, just a piece of advice, make ur reviews a bit more complete cos ppl like those and will make an effort to review ur stuff...just a suggestion. gtg, love and good luck. Twilight |
| BecomingMyself 2003-10-31 ch 1, | A very strong poem, with a flow due to subttle rhyming, and some rhythm, well written, though I am not sure if I can relate to the topic or message send in this one...Yet the two last lines made the poem, for they are powerful words to understand the deeper meaning of the works... Write on! |
| The Beast 2003-10-30 ch 1, | Thanks, it isnt every day someone writes a poem about me. ;) ~The Beast~ |
| suckerplucker 2003-10-30 ch 1, | um HOLY EGO TRIP BATMAN hehe, i jest, um, kind of. This is interesting if immensely self-serving, and i like the patterns and repetitions zac clownpuppet87@aol.com |
| Jesi Lynna 2003-10-29 ch 1, | It's got rhythm, It's got flair. I like it. Reminds me of stormy weather at sea. Are you mad at someone? |