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| Damaged 2003-11-03 ch 2,  | abuseThis is a great beginning and has lots of potential. But, it's short and choppy and leaves you with a sense of incomplete-ness. I recommend you combine the first two chapters or make one longer ... I dunno ... but like I said, it's a great start. Update soon! |
| Jessie Flower 2003-11-01 ch 1, | abuseMe like it! Hope you update soon! |