yeah, cant say im usually much for reading... at all, but i almost made it through the first chapter. and i think the pinnicle of this story, as of chapter 1 is: "'It is hard,' I say simply"

giant lizards? eek!county of Slovas...? :)no but really its good. keep going.

and I think you should write poetry. You have the right kind of command of English for it, with all your allustrious descriptions etc.

swet! A long-awaited, long um... chapter, that rocks! Yay for backstory! Good imagery and the like. It was easy to visualize all the action and the like. Can't wait for more. Yay Siro! ACK! 8 lizards! Run, Siro, Run!

now i am interested in what grathas is doing... good job building suspense in this chapter.

woohoo! its updated! =D I like this chapter, a little confusing but I'm sure Siro will have fun in his little medieval Sin City...keep writing!

Sweet an awesome. Go Siro! And Siel... and um, Brosh too for that matter ^_^ They're so awesome. Yay! And yay for Aria and her emotional breakdowns.

Evil! Creepy evil guy! Evil demon guy! Energy sucking evil creepy demon guy. Okay, I get my point across

He's pretty cool though.

oh that's just great! *laughing* Awesome action sequence. Wonderful demonstration of Aria's foolishness and rash impulsivenes getting her royally screwed. Hilrarious and awesome!

great work.

ok, you definitely have to keep going. I am a wimp, but you even succeeded in making me tear up when they were in the dream. sweet story. i can tell that you fancy yourself in it. ;) don't worry though, you would have made a good knight if we had lived while there still were knights. The scary demon guy is kinda random and confuing though. Good Job. Do continue.

I love this story with a passion...Siro and Siel are pimps and I want to marry them BOTH...hehe and I love the first chapter and when he looks up at her from the tower *swoon*, also the dream sequences thingys are awesome, I just wish one of them would remember! ah! I'd say keep writing but then you'd neglect *my* story, and we musn't have that... =) anyway, ur fan club loves it so keep it up!

good development, but it seemed kind of sudden. I understand that she's rather emotional, but it seems like this is a rather small thing to suddenly decide to run away about. Unless this wasn't the first time she had issues with this kind of thing, but I didn't really get that idea. Seemed more like a first time thing for her. Perhaps she just acts that much on a whim, but I dunno. Short chapter. Big development.

ah, the joys of the irish and destiny. Not together, necessarily, but just fun. Yay for fun characters! This desinty thing is getting quite interesting. Onwards!

aw...so sad. Fun with Fate though, in terms of Aria. She rolls her eyes a lot. Heh heh. The King seems kind of nice, but kind of shallow, but lots of kings seem to be. At least she knows that money can't buy her happiness, in a way. Anyway, nice development of her relationship with her father, the kingdom, and Aria herself.

Eek. Or should I say, "yesh." Crazy sudden introduction of a seemingly random but creepy character. Seems a bit out of place. Also, while I'm being critical, it doesn't really develop the character any. It doesn't feel like he flows much, but then again, he is being possessed and having creepy stuff happen to him. Dunno, just something seemed a little out of whack. Definately curious as to how he develops and intercepts the other characters. Next...