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| EvilAngelReturns 2005-02-04 ch 3,  | abuseThis is ** awesome! (please excuse the language. I'm really excited right now) You have to update soon! |
| Kewie 2004-01-16 ch 3, | abuseWai... Me likes. Me want more. ^_^ Me want a Seth plushie. Yep, me do. *applauds* Very nice. |
| Liebe Sasa 2003-12-21 ch 3, | abuseI love it. I absolutely adore this story. You have to continue. You really do. Or I'll... I'll... Hunt you down and sick rabid prairie dogs on you, or something equally grotesque. It really is a good story. Original plot, interesting characters, well written. I like it. ~Sasa |
| Maddox Grey 2003-11-23 ch 3, | abuseGood idea, no obvious spelling or gramatical errors, which is great and commonly overlooked. The pacing is a little sporadic, but thats alright. Overall a job well done, just take your time moving from scene to scene. Think of your story as a movie, as seperate frames, don't allow it to jump five frames ahead and leave the reader in the dark. |
| Faythe 2003-11-20 ch 1, | abuseI sat reading through all this last night but didn't comment. So today I had to come and find it again to let you know how great it is and how much I enjoyed reading it. You have all the right elements, and if you continue, it could be absolutely amazing! Please keep writing it! I don't often say that about stories... |
| Casey 2003-11-19 ch 3, anon. | abuseWow, I have absolutely no idea how you came up with this. It's so amazing and so original and creative. Just wow. |
| SweetSun 2003-11-19 ch 3, anon. | abuse*gives Izty a dozen cookies* Yaayy, you updated!! And so quickly I had to give you more than one! ;) (Aren't I such a sweetie-pie?? ;P) And as for the story, I just like it more and more :) It's pretty obvious that the drink was what killed Jason.. but I hope Seth didn't do it on purpose.. leaving it there and all.. :S That would be just too cruel to Jason.. and his fiancé.. I feel so sorry for her.. :( I know it's a slash-fic but Jason seemed (and seems) to truly love her.. it's just so sad.. :( |
| SweetSun 2003-11-18 ch 2, anon. | abuseWow.. I don't know about the rest but this beginning shows the story to be quite different from other vampire-stories I've read.. Cheers to you for accomplishing that! :D Can't wait for more so pleease update soon!! ^^ (I'll even give you a cookie ;) |
| M Welles 2003-11-15 ch 2, | abuseWow. That was so, so very good. You must write more, I command you! ^^ First off, the plot's pretty good. Everything is so unexpected, and it's great how you keep the suspense before revealing anything (ex. how he died). The characters are also very good, and your descriptions are ace. Although you warned us in the beginning it would be gorey, it isn't completely (not by my standards, anyway), but you kept it very macabre without making it gross. Which is very good. ^^ Well done! xMegan |
| Minnie Souris 2003-11-02 ch 1, | abuseI don't know what to say, I'm running out of superlatives for you. This is really good, different and well written as usual. Looking forward to the next chapter Mary |
| MatterTeleportal 2003-11-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow, your story is amazing! It s very touching because you can relate so amazingly well with the main character. Keep writing! |