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| nfgcassie 2004-02-02 ch 20,  | abusei loved the whole idea of your story. and it was very very good but the ending was sort of abrupt, isnt it? |
| Loah 2004-01-30 ch 20, anon. | abuseAAh, I know the feeling of not wanting to end a story because you like the characters. Personally, I like Jack, but that's my opinion. |
| Eleni 2004-01-27 ch 20, anon. | abuseaw! i loved this! i still love it! your great. please write a sequel/prequel/something of that nature. jack is deff too cool for school baby. :) |
| Vincenza 2004-01-25 ch 19, anon. | abuseGreat story! Love it very much. Must write more. |
| jules2206 2004-01-22 ch 19, | abusehye. this is a cool update, she's really getting outta there yay! Greg is cool I like him so much! anyway pleas update soon, BUBBAI! |
| rubygirl181 2004-01-22 ch 19, | abuseI love it so far, please hurry up and update! |
| Loah 2004-01-21 ch 18, anon. | abuseThe title of this chapter definitely fits. At the end, I was going, "Wait, what now??" |
| Khalan 2004-01-21 ch 18, | abuseWow. That was a surprising twist. Update soon please, bye |
| jules2206 2004-01-16 ch 17, | abusehye...i am so loving this story... I really like it.. I love Jack and Jeremy.. I dont like Chad OR her parents or her sister lol but i relaly like this story.. maybe I'll like Greg aswell if he lets her use his mobile.. her worlds just pretty ** up at the minute ay anyway please update soon, BUBBAI! |
| poodlefreak 2003-12-23 ch 16, | abusei guess everyone has a different belief, and I shouldn't have said that as if that is the only answer about love at first sight, and I'm sorry. anyway, I like this chapter, there's a lot of dialogue. Anyway, keep writing, I want to know what happens to Natalie! |
| nfgcassie 2003-12-15 ch 16, | abuseyoure story just keeps getting better and better. keep it up and update soon |
| Ariel S 2003-12-12 ch 16, | abuseNice ending line. It really makes you think... |
| Courting Insanity 2003-12-10 ch 16, | abuseThis is good. Hehe.. Her parents are whackos man, that is some serious bs there! For a moment, I was starting to actually believe the stuff they were putting out, so no wonder she was placed in the inso, but man. Waking up to what Natalie did, that was whacked out. The whole life that Natalie had thought of before with Chad, that is.. so blah. I'm not dissing anyone who lives like that or anything, but it's just... stereotypical. Jack sounds awesome though. Anyway, update soon coz I wanna know how the escape goes. Charmed |
| Emma 2003-12-10 ch 16, anon. | abusei cant wait too see how she gets out.. make sure u update soon! |
| Laralie 2003-12-10 ch 16, | abuseOk everyone...we are all allowed to make up our own minds on love at first sight. If you believe in it, then fine put it in your story, its what you think, its your story, tell it anyway your want. You have that liberty as a writer. If you don't believe in it, you have no right to criticize someone else for thinking so or for insisting that they don't use it in their story. Let's let the writer do what the writer wants and if you have a personal issue with it then this is one of those cases I think this isnt "constructive critisiscm". Thanks, ~L PS nice chapter! |