I love the song, too.

This is a great take on the song, I know how this feels. Very creative, and nice imagery, too, by the way. Terrific work, keep writing.

WOW!
That's intense. It sounds like you wrote about something you actually experienced, although I hope you didn't. It's hard to describe what I felt. One the one hand the text is very sad, but on the other hand there seems to be hope right around the corner. The images were very strong. I don't know the "Something Corporate"-song but you really made me wish to listen to it. I might go and check it out at my record store. Well done! Really!
P.S.: "Balance Lost" is finished, just in case you still want to know how it ends.