why does she want to run?? oo now I'm curious...haha. i don't get the part "who moved to scotland?" a brunette said..." maybe it's just me, but i think that kind of slows it down, but if it has meaning maybe you could elaborate or describe it a bit more. GOOd descriptions and imagery...but what's the girl's name? haha, you never said it. This is very good, keep writing,
~kali~