awesome work! this one was really well written, my favourite lines were
'summer rain
slow hours
all drain'
the whole thing flowed so well, and your choice of words was very good (i.e: you didn't use overused words, for example rhyming 'together' with 'forever' you get the picture)
and thank you very much for reviewing 'fool's parade' i was so happy when i saw the review! and as far as religion goes, i can see that you're kinda 'half-and-half' am i right? kinda half buddhist half christian? forgive me if i'm wrong...sorry to babble on, long reviews are fun!
chloe