Wow, I just keep reading more great stuff from you. This is vivid, it really is. And it flows. This could be a song also, if you wanted it to. It's definitely got that rhythmic feel to it.

I love one particular line. "Locked up with forever's key." Wow. That's just so powerful, even on its own. This is great.

Nosferatu Diabolica Necromanticus...

it's very good... vampires rock.

good job. I love it when people can give humanity to a seemingly "evil" creature.