Anti-feminist propoganda, sexualising violence against women... Rubbish. You have no concept of what you're writing.

Strange. But in a good way, I enjoyed reading it. Poor Gabriel was so manipulated by her. Why did she want to die and give up her control over him anyhow? Scary. Nice work, though.

Fictionpress doesn't recognize formatted elipses- it just turns them into periods. (I'm saying this because I thought there was a destroyed elipse in "'Sorcha.I love you.'" but it works fine if it's just a normal period too.)
And again, this was brilliant and wonderful and totally sucked me in.

Wow... That was brilliant! I swear, that has to be the best i've ever read.. I was hooked from the begining to the end.. Though short, it still is excellently wirtten, so it leaves you satisfied..
Amazing.. Yet rather sad, but then again, I like the sad stuff. Very good. I'm adding this to my favorites.

Would you mind terribly if I cussed? Cause this is ** amazing! Truly it is.
The story's so unlike anything else I've ever read. It's so filled with emotion yet it almost seems sterile at times, it's dark, even if it seems light at times, it reads like something from a different world, yet in a way, it hits close to home. It's an oxymoron, that's what it is.
I can't even begin to describe how I love this. You make prose look like poetry, without ever letting it become too poetic to concentrate on the story itself. "She only ever wanted someone to love her." That line is going to stay with me for a while. I love this story, to death, I'd say.
("Update," she whispered. "Please update.")

That is...amazing. From the minute I started reading this I was pulled into a daze, something about it just made me want to keep writing. That's the mark of a good writer. Cudos to you on that. This is really amazing. It's exciting and fast-paced, yet slow paced at the same time. It's so descriptive that I can't help but be there. It's amazing and the question Gabriel kept asking:
- "a demon or a being of light or something else entirely" that's amazing. It's the mark of something real. Knowing so much about the person yet not quite certain about the person themself. WOW! I seriously like this a lot. And if this is a story, I should hope to see more!
Keep up the amazing work.
Love always,
A-Light-From-Your-Darkness

That was bloody brilliant, and I use the word "bloody" in context with the story. I've rarely read anything that well written on FictionPress. Really, I was amazed. The plot was great, and mingled with the characters, who are at once mysterious and yet so real, you created this fantastic tale. I thought it would continue, as in, this was the first chapter of a many chaptered murder story. But you took me in the wrong direction, good for you. Great blood imagery, and it's quite extraodinary how you called her a "seraphim" and said her hair was like a halo, when to me she seemed something more demonic. Well that was what I gathered from it. Oh, and great dialogue, the speech was great, nothing over-done with too many fancy words and such.
"She was a flame of a girl. She sparked and flitted, rarely wavering. Once she touched something with her undeniable heat, she spread and spread, silent and quick. The only problem with flames is that, eventually, they have to go out."
Love that part, and many other parts which were worded with such artistic wonder. I tried my hand at alliteration...
Anyways, really, this was a great tale. It left me dazed with wonder at the end and the girl was quite an interesting character.
Please do write more, I'd love to read your stuff.

Once again, you've shown your prowess with a pen...well computer and have crafted something of superior quality for your readers. Well done, though I am not sure if this was meant to stand alone or not. Either way, it's good and it holds a nice artistic quality and originality that is becoming less commonplace. Please do keep writing.

erm. this is really good. no offence to everyone else but most of the stuff on this site is a load of crap. nice to see somebody who can not only string a sentence together and use grammar properly, but do it artistically. bravo and all that cal.

Such a sad story... but nicely written. I was hooked until the end.

This is a good story! Scorcha is so weird but she livens things up. Please update!