You know, even *I* liked that!! Well done; it rhymes but it doesn't suck, and the last line is very good. This reminds me of my friend Keith and his "girl situation..."

Wow. I'm very impressed. Words were concrete, rhymes were good. =)

Great job. Read mine? ^^

I love this poem. Rythmn can kill a poem that rhyme,I've seen it many times before but the flow of this poem saves it from being with the corny-sounding rhyming poems. It seemed very serious, and I was just emersed with what you had written.

Very very nice job.