I especially like the soft warm sounds in "warm" and "gone".

To me it seems a bit superfluous and I find myself not entirely understanding your gist.

Maybe you could have extended this into something longer with more depth, so that you could explore these ideas further?

Beautiful; you make angst just as addictive as love.

* Noelle

beautiful.. I love the red thing.. nice job

hm...interesting

red rain is warm-i can taste that

ahh, i say that too much

do you know if you review too much you start having a review book of what your mind knows to say

for example:"ah, interestingi really like the taste in this piece"

(so i was looking at the things i cant ask you

are you gaga?

that made me laugh

and i am way too off topic for myself sometimes. i apologize)

Cool. Sounds like a sexual relationship where one party has deeper feelings that the other party has no idea of. I dunno tho, maybe I'm just crazy. And thanks for the many reviews, and, I'll let you in on a little secret: As much as I can write in French, I make a million and one mistakes just speaking casually, since, it's my second language. And I'm jealous that you speak German (and btw you speak English better than most English people do, so be proud!) Because, I'm part German (I'm part everything!), and I've always wanted to be able to speak German. :)

I like your style and how you write your poems.

Snipped, Cutt and Pasted sweetly.

I loved it.

You also like Japanese? I do too. :DHajimemashite!

oh crazy! i like the imagry. good job.

this is really well written, short, to the point, accurate. good analogies too. keep going!

Ein sehr schönes Gedicht. Es stimmt einen nachdenklich!
Doska

wow i have nothing to say to praise this
"sits dumbstruck"
lol i humbly bow to u

I'm guessing the three meanings of "last" are - and don't hit me if I am wrong -
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Last Night - as in the previous night
Last Night - as in the last ever night
Last Night - as in "go on forever" night
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Am I right?
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I loved this, honestly!

wow...loved it.

WOW. mysteriös! Die Sache mit dem "last" ist einfach genial - das Gedicht an sich auch. Faszinierend. Würd schon sagen, dass es um Liebe - oder eine Form davon - geht...
cio, hoellenwauwau

So dark and so beautiful