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| KatyaChekov 2008-11-03 ch 5,   | I liked the old lady dying. XD That was just too perfect. One complaint, though...you don't need to keep describing hair color and such. Readers know what the characters look like, so repeating descriptions can get annoying, especially in shorter stories. The elf lady's description, spread out as it was, was good. Like the story so far. It helps relieve the boredom of a school day, and is a good story to boot. |
| Elle Winters 9 2008-10-18 ch 17, | Yeah, it was a abrupt and didn't seem to suit, but it was dragging on for awhile. anyway it was funny =) |
| Elle Winters 9 2008-10-18 ch 3, | i think you should be a song writer. i was sorely disappointed when i tried to find the song on google. miserable failure. |
| Elle Winters 9 2008-10-18 ch 2, | HAHHAHAHAHA a genius that she is. |
| a beginner 2008-07-04 ch 17, | i Really Honestly, truely, without doubt like it... |
| FreeDaChickens 2008-05-04 ch 1, | This looks interesting, but Ren is really a Mary Sue. Her beauty, generous figure, knee length silver hair, and purple eyes contribute to this. To make her less of a Mary Sue, her eyes should probably be an actual color (when have you ever seen purple eyes?), and her hair should be a realistic color and length (silver "straight, knee-length locks"?) In addition, you should never, ever interrupt your story with an author's note ("large purple eyes narrowed in a ferocious scowl. (a/n: yes, I'm obsessed with purple eyes. grins hehehe)"). It's great that you love purple eyes. You can tell everyone that at the end of your chapter. But please, don't interrupt your story to give the readers your personal opinion on the character! I think there's a lot of potential in this story, but you should try making Eirena less of a Mary Sue. FreeDaChickens |
| atreyu love 2007-07-29 ch 1, | haha, it seems interesting :D |
| Angel of the Fallen 2007-06-02 ch 17, | i liked it alot! Ren's very funny and i think her and Varien make a great although hillariously funny couple! |
| Laughing In the Night 2007-05-30 ch 17, | I love it! It's hilarious! |
| Clara Jenn Agustinus 2007-01-03 ch 17, | Oh gosh, of course I like this! Pure randomness, and deliriously hilarious. I particularly like Seiral (he has a pretty long name, that one, and weird too) ... A great fun, with so many LOL moments ... great job. =) |
| Wolf bathed in Star-light 2006-11-28 ch 17, | WOWZAS! i loved it, i was practically crying when they thought Varien died. but then i was like, you cannot have a story with magic carrots, and battries that when combined with carrots turn into sword AND THEN let someone die. especially Varien. and then it was okay, and i was hapy, andi didn't cry and babbling. okay great story! i loved it, i now intend to go read the rest :D:D:D:D |
| Lucky Taco Salad 2006-07-17 ch 17, | Wow! That was a great story! I am truly impressed with your character devopment and overall plot in general. I love how the more things changed (romatically) between Varian and Ren, the more they stayed the same (Psycho Cow! Pervert!). Good work! Sequel? |
| Fresh Harvest 2006-07-16 ch 17, | Haha, this was a really funny story :p I liked the randomness. Even though I liked your notes, at first, it popped up too often and got pretty distracting. Towards the later chapters, though, it was good :) Didn't agree with everything, but I still liked it, and it was a reasonably light read. I laughed a lot and had fun. Nice job =) |
| whisper in th dark 2006-07-16 ch 7, | for some odd reason i can see varien with an English accent... |
| brittle hearts 2006-07-13 ch 2, | So cute. XD |