Most interesting. It's different, the way it rhymes in some places and doesn't in others, but I like it. I'm sure that blues/pop rhythm can be done. ^^
Tenika Dargan

I like it.. I love you you say the same thing with different metaphors that is so cool... and I can relate all to much... i don't like hte oh in the last line.. i dunno it seems to formal for a song... but im crazy lol... excellent poem it rocks!