wow that would make an amazing song

You and your friend seem to have written sister poems. Interesting ...

Chilling. "Come to Me in Dreams" is still my fave though. Anyways, yet again, I love your poem/story style. Very beautiful.

Ah, Val, you have done it again. Made me really think and really try to understand.

Like all your writing, this is very good. I will patiently wait for more.

It's pretty depressive stuff. Apart from the layout and some capitals, I don't see anything wrong with it. You managed to handle descriptions very well and let the reader have an insight of what the person was feeling. I wonder if you wrote this in some kind of inspiration or if you wrote it because you wanted to release some pain. Either way, it worked really good.

Lovely..

Creepy. Very good, but creepy.

that was awesome! really beautiful, nice job