Hmmses, it could use some betaing, the tenses you're using are a bit confusing, you keep switching. . .other than that, it's well written, and the words and phrases you used to express yourself were chock full of good imagery! *sighs* But I wish that you didn't have to write things like this at all. Stupid depression. *hugs*

I like this! Dont nesasarily (i can't spell that word... lol) agree, especially about God forsaking this world, but I like it. :)

Didi: U SHOULD BE A POET U WRITE TO MANY POEMS! by the way me going to have a kid!
Guess: *blush* ahem