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| Bi-curious George 2008-09-18 ch 1,   | Your...writing...is...incredible. The only part I didn't really like was "My lips curved downward in a soft frown." -'cause that just brought an image of hairy lips to my mind. Which is not a nice image... "“Maybe I could just hold my breath.” “You’d start breathing again once you passed out.”" - I love how you allude to subjects without directly stating them. Suicide, right? And I always wondered what'd happen if I held my breath for that long... I don't understand why some sections were in italics and others weren't though? "Oh what a work of art is the body of a man." - was that a paraphrase of Hamlet? 'Oh what a piece of work is man'? "There was something there, dark against the darkness, the shadow of a shadow’s shadow." - absolutely...incredible. I won't even pretend that I understand what's going on...but your writing just...blew me away. I really hope you get to read this because...omg this is just...incredible. I'm favouriting this BIG TIME. |
| super happy nuclear girl 2006-06-10 ch 1, | I liked this a lot. I liked how you write and how you describe the room the person is in. I also like how strange this story is, it's creepy and somewhat indifferent but its still gives you enough detail for you to understand. I really enjoyed reading it :] |
| DarkLilly 2004-03-31 ch 1, | Kind of freaked me out, as I am in the basement, alone, with only one light on because the others burnt out... And since you succeeded in freaking me out I present you with a 110% out of 100% rating prize! O.o Maybe I shouldn't review with lack of sleep crawling around in my head... I just pictured this weird little thing crawling in my head now...X.x I love your story! |
| ddz008 2003-11-15 ch 1, | eextrange but interesting! hope to see more of your works! :D |