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| cementtrampoline 2004-07-27 ch 1,   | I liked the short sweetnes, *is goign to try some constructive criticism woo* but the last line, "The flame of shadow" I don't know about you, but personally when I want revenge its a bit more of a flame...more intense then that. |
| msu 2004-07-24 ch 1, | Hmm, very interesting. Been in that situation..and it does take over with a burning passion. ~Mel |
| A Beautiful Nightmare 2004-03-14 ch 1, | Sounds like an angry ninja... very nice... |
| shinco 2004-02-07 ch 1, | Wow, (I'm sorry you haven't heard from me in a while! *makes a sad face of apology*) I LOVED that! Especially the last line! The flame of shadow... whoaa, such IMAGINATION! Very, VERY nice! Way cool one! Oh, um... I'm putting you on my favorite author's list and author alert list! |
| lronMaiden 2004-02-04 ch 1, | short yet very...OUT THERE...i dont wanna say powerful cos thats an understatement. |
| cosmo-queen 2003-12-05 ch 1, | Excellent portrayal of revenge. "The flame of shadow"- I loved that line. Really meaningful. Well done :) *cosmo-queen* |
| LittleChoLo 2003-11-28 ch 1, | I love 'a flame if shadow'. It's really beautiful. Nice haiku! Ps my story 'room' was actually about an egg *hands cookie anyway*. |
| Dirty Wallpaper 2003-11-21 ch 1, | wow, amazing haiku, dark, consuming. intense, like al good haikus are! i really loved the last line, i found it very...uh...thought provoking, very interesting, intrigued me deeply. "the flame of a shadow" yes, definitely loved that line, i have a feeling it will haunt me all night, LOVE IT, kudos. |
| Roadside Dryer 2003-11-20 ch 1, | Very good! You have good taste in authors! Sorrow singer is awesome! I love there poems, twisted little secret is great to! Them theres you, your great two! |
| Infinity Plus One 2003-11-15 ch 1, | BLA thats good. |
| purrrrfect poetry 2003-11-12 ch 1, | i am really sorry but that was so long i didnt finish reading it. its...um...wots the word...um...er...its..um...interesting? y do u wanna gat revenge its ok |
| drtimphd 2003-11-10 ch 1, | Very well done. Remember the Chinese(?) proverb: 'When seeking revenge, be prepared to dig two graves.' Hopefully you don't go wacko and do something stupid... :( |
| Infinity04 2003-11-10 ch 1, | i feel that a lot. **guilty** |
| Soviet 2003-11-10 ch 1, | Also very well done.. good job.. keep up the great work |