Swet. O_O

Wow. I absolutely love your description, the metaphors are so mystical. "A star was stolen for each eye." Wow. That's beautiful.

I think you don't need the apostrophe for "mortals", though. Just letting you know.

It reminds me of a poem my friend wrote about a black unicorn. This is almost like a complement to it. They would sound fabulous together.

But it sounds great on its own. Beautiful stuff. :)

omg. amazing. this goes on my favorites! I can see it in my head... whoa.