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| suckerplucker 2004-04-18 ch 1,   | This is one of the best really short poems i've read on this site! It's a really great quick sketch, and I feel like if you tried to expand this it would just fail. So i'm glad that you let it be this length zac clownpuppet87@aol.com |
| Ian Shweltser 2004-02-05 ch 1, | Very nice. THe simplicity makes it very good. please review me |
| MR.SEAN 2004-01-12 ch 1, | lol, thats cool! |
| Chocolate 4 You 2003-12-28 ch 1, | That was awesome! Keep up the wonderful poetry writing! Thanks for the reviews ^ - ^ ^ . ^ ~Shaolin 10 |
| rufflesia 2003-12-14 ch 1, | e, don't you think it's kinda short? May be you can make another stanza of this then it'll be better. :) |
| RainShadow2005 2003-11-28 ch 1, | The wonderful thing about haiku is that it's a story reduced to it's bare minimum. If done right, a lot of the story that wasn't expressly written can be assumed. In this one, you didn't write that the cat spotted the bird, but judging from the hurried departure, I suddenly knew such an event had taken place. Nice technique in using that. I love that type of 'read between the lines' thing. |
| Emi Amara 2003-11-26 ch 1, | Hi, this is really good, i have a bluebird haiku too! the only problem with this *and it doesn't matter* is that it's main catogory isn't haiku, but they don't let you put in nature haiku anyway, which is annoying, neways...Good poem Cya =) *WG |
| Sycho Skitz 2003-11-25 ch 1, | Lovely imagery! I envy your talent for writing haiku...lol -Skitz p.s. thanks for the reviews! they are very much appreciated. |
| Mista Mugs 2003-11-24 ch 1, | Ha! Another great one. Like I said, you have a great gift for imagism. Very nice use of the colour blue and the animal (bird). Cheers. |
| MiriamP 2003-11-22 ch 1, | I like it a lot. Its a beautiful haiku |
| Tears of the Wind 2003-11-20 ch 1, | cute, i can see it right there, a summers/spirngs day and the cat is staring at it, the bluebird stares back. It then senses danger and flies away before harm can even touch it. Write more!(Maybe a bit longer though) ~*~Midnights' Yami~*~ |