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| pearlsinjune 2005-06-11 ch 6,  | abusethis story is awsome i hope you keep with it |
| subtleline 2004-09-20 ch 6, | abuseContinue Damnit! Brandy! Must know wut hapens! Must know!! Cliffs r EVIL!! Continue soon!! PLEASE!! UPDATE! |
| shadowedskies 2004-08-12 ch 6, | abuse*meep!* That can not be good! I cant wait to see what he'll do to Brandy. >_< I'm scared! Please hurry and finish! |
| galene 2004-08-09 ch 6, anon. | abuse^_^ i'm enjoying your story! please write more. i'm wonderin what the deal is with Paul and his sister ~galeneg |
| Stefen 2004-07-29 ch 6, | abuseI love your writing! Please update! Toby and Danny are so cute together!! |
| StrawberryAlarmClock 2004-07-13 ch 6, anon. | abuseThis story is amazing. I love it. I am liking you more and more everytime I read a story by you, haha. Write faster, I am impatient! And who isn't fond of Branden?? He's my favorite character. Just out of curiosity, have you seen the show My So-Called Life? Branden reminds me so much of the gay guy from that show. One thing that bothers me in the stories that you write is that when you are having the character think something, you write the sentence in 'things like this'. I don't think you need to do this, because it is already in their point of view, so they are already thinking everything. EX: I was trying very hard not to think about Danny on my way to the fountain, and if just walking was distracting me, it was hard to imagine what would be going through my mind trying to sit through a boring psychology lecture. 'Plans for tonight? Or maybe just that kiss.' I felt myself turning red, and my face could've been used as a stage light when I heard someone wolf- whistle right behind me. It is already known that he is thinking this whole paragraph, I don't think you need to put 'these things' to write what they are thinking. :-/ Constructive criticism... I love your stories, write more! |
| Seque Me ad Meum Somnium 2004-07-07 ch 4, | abuseI still love it since the last time I left a review a few hours ago...Alright...Gotta keep reading! |
| Seque Me ad Meum Somnium 2004-07-07 ch 2, | abuseLove IT! Great story! I'll keep reading now! (In Love with the Love between Danny and Toby) |
| I am no longer writing 2004-06-24 ch 6, | abuseooh.. please update soon :P i love this.. and the way you write is amazing. great story.. i hope brandy doesn't get hurt too badly *pleading look* |
| behind the lights 2004-06-08 ch 6, | abuseBRANDY...NO! ! ! that wuz just pure evil! i love this story & u must update... *+*starts2 tear up*+* please dont *+*sob*+* hurt Brandy |
| Isolde the Silent 2004-06-04 ch 6, | abuseyou are a horrible person, ariel-chan. you can you leave the story with such a HUGE cliffy. when i shall wait with much anticipation for your update keep up the amazing work. ~Kwade~ |
| Lia 2004-03-17 ch 5, anon. | abuseHey! Just started reading this- its pretty good so far; I love Branden's character!! =) Update soon! |
| vanburen 2004-02-03 ch 5, | abusehmm...you don't really have much of a chapter here, if you're gonna take out the other parts...maybe you should have added more? |
| qq 2004-01-30 ch 5, | abuseI liked the chapter. Update soon. Thanks. |
| ekay 2004-01-30 ch 5, anon. | abuseI LIKE IT VERY MUCH! even though im not really into this slash thing but this is very good! good job , hon. |