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| Crewger 2007-02-22 ch 3,   | I dunno whether ur alive or not but this is a good story |
| kayee 2003-12-08 ch 1, | Arg...I have another Chapter written up, but it won't download so I can't post it...hopefully I can download it soon...sorry. |
| XxLostparmawenxX 2003-11-25 ch 2, | Ug! A cliffy? How dare u! I LUV it!! MORE PLZ!! (btw: This is ticked3off) |
| Dreams-Of-Destiny 2003-11-23 ch 2, | So much emotion! I love it. I felt so sorry fo her. Those people were so mean to her... sheesh. This is excellent, you should really continue with this, I am throughly enjoying it. |
| Dreams-Of-Destiny 2003-11-23 ch 1, | Aw, that was so sad! I feel so sorry for her. I can't wait to read the next chapter.^_^ |
| Wrong Name Tag 2003-11-21 ch 1, | Lovely story. Sad, pretty, real... all the elements a story could need. Well, there's more, but those are always great. I like the part about reality; it's somewhat cliched and used before, but I guess the way you did it didn't make it seem so much like that. As well, the ending was great. Subtle, easy and just... workable. Your descriptions were very nice, simple but effective. Overall, a great story. I'll have to come back to read the second one. Kudos and daisies. -Jess |
| Edi 2003-11-15 ch 2, | HI! My name is Edi and my friend Jamie referred me to this story. And I must say, IT'S VERY ENDEARING! It's sad in the beginning, and it tore through my heart as I read, feeling Arelah's pain. And for this Ezris character...I liked how you made him sound like a pompous egomaniac at first. Then bam! I changed my mind pretty quickly! This is excellently written and I anticipate more chapters in the near future. If you're worried about mistakes, you might want to take on a beta reader to see if they could catch the mistakes you missed. I saw a few but they're nothing major. I write stories too and I'm not perfect either. But you have a great way of expressing your characters' emotions and that's what I liked best from what I've read. Keep up the good work! Yours in friendship, Edi |
| redrose 2003-11-15 ch 1, | This is a wonderful story so far! You have a strong vocabulary and make good use of it in bringing such expression to this piece. Please continue writing- I'm looking forward to the rest of it! (I know how you feel about showing it to your friends.) |
| x Frost x 2003-11-12 ch 1, | ...i need to see something don't mind me |