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| George Wilkersen 2007-07-04 ch 1,  | abuseWell, hey, this rocks! "Crest", being a brand name, should be capitalized. |
| aleppine 2004-01-27 ch 1, | abuseHeh, funny because it reminded me of another 21 year old Pink Floyd-manic Texan. Strange, ne? And it reminded me of several Pink Floyd song fragments and one particular song all at once, funnily enough. I love the surrealness sewn into this. Some of my favourite lines: 'A preacher in his parish hall, so lonely without sin? A teacher lost inside the small immensities within?' - You do rhyme very well. It doesn't sound forced or awkward. And my favourite of all had to be: 'A tiny mind a broken orb a little lost refrain...' That was just brilliant. |
| glitterjewele 2003-12-18 ch 1, | abuseah, now this right here is a classic example of sheer wonky donkey brilliance. the words just flow and rhyme effortlessly (or so it seems), i love reading poems like this, it sounds like someone's whispering continuously in your ear. very cool effect, especially loved the last stanza, awesome work. :) |
| Arynnl 2003-12-11 ch 1, | abuseThat was very well done ryan, i really like the tone and the structure of the poem. One of my favorite stanzas is the last one especially 'a beautiful and fragile child that God could not ordain' You are a poetry god. :-D |
| exotic poetry 2003-11-17 ch 1, | abusewow that was really good. You've reviewed a few of my poems, so I felt like I should share the love. Good job, i really enjoyed it. =) |
| toxikon 2003-11-13 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. I like the last verse. |