wow, its uber good. i really liked it, the last three lines are a bit weak, but it doesnt take away from the rest all that much. great subject!

This was a good poem, I do like the way the war and photography stuff are combined in this poem.

I loved this! I studied photography in college, so it was not hard for me to envision this poem as I read it. Photographs still speak volumes long after their respective events have passed and you illustrated that fact beautifully here.

Hi, I THINK this will be my first review of your work. You reviewed "pomegranate seeds". I will tel you I put it under "haiku" but it is actually a katauta:
Katauta
The Katauta is an unrhymed three-line poem with the following syllable
counts: 5/7/7. It is one half of a sedoka [doubled poem] (5/7/7,5/7/7). A
pair of katauta as a single poem may address the same subject from
differing perspectives.

Anyway ... your poem is alluring and has a wonderful poetic resonance. I like/no, LOVE how you combined two subject s BUT I DID NOT GET LOST! Beck does this in his songs sometimes, combining subjects.
Great flow. I just love the feel of this poem even though it is sad! I am going to try to add it to fave stories, but I think I am all full up there
;-(
SO, I am also going to add you to fave author. This one poem is good enough! Ususally I need at least three get a feel for the person.

The two subjects do combine for quite a combination. You did excellent work on this piece.


~Heart of the Sword

A heartrending ballad ma'am
Thou art a woman of vision
Quite admirable, I salute thee
for unleashing another poets
melancholic, cheerless passion

I wouldn't change a thing! This was wonderful work! I absolutely loved it. It flowed beautifully. Splendid work!

~*~AbunaiChikara
Ps. Thank you so much for your review. It was very much appreciated.

Poignant. Definitely. Just at the end and beginning two verses ur structure of two rhyming lines per four-line phrase was a bit out when you added an extra line, but you might have done that for effect. If so, it was effective. Onle last point for improvement and I say this to loads of people but to me it's that important: don't try too hard to make a poem rhyme or to make the syllable pattern absolutely perfect. This poem is deep and meaningful, and that's far superior to the fact that it's got a well-structured syllable and rhyme pattern.

A very creative topic to write a poem on. I like that very much.

Interesting poem, amazing how you combined the two topics! It works really well together, you've done a good job of it! I love photography too, so I could understand it really well :) Lovely poem!