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| Sally-andersonn 2005-08-13 ch 3,   | oh. romantic. i really really loved this story. mysterious too. |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-08-13 ch 2, | oh. compelling stuff. very dark. |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-08-13 ch 1, | very good intro. |
| allyburner 2005-07-22 ch 1, | It's a brilliant start. The first paragraph's a bit all over the place, but the rest is wonderful. I love it. :D Can't wait to read more! -Ally B. |
| allyburner 2005-07-22 ch 2, | Oh my God... he was shot?!?!?! That ending is so good! There're a few problems with typos and I think you may have joined a couple of sentences together, but I'm afraid I can't remember where specifically. I think you should separate the talking into different paragraphs, bcos it's clearer then. :D It's a wonderful story. :D -Ally B. |
| allyburner 2005-07-22 ch 3, | Wow! It's brilliant! I love it! The way you engage the reader is great. It feels like the person is talking to my face. It's brilliant. :D Keep going with it! Wait, I'll review the previous chapters... :D -Ally B. |
| hahah 2003-11-15 ch 1, | this looks verry good. are you from boston? i am from boston |
| Kiki Fay 2003-11-14 ch 1, | OOh this is interesting... the internet issue. I like. Your writing style is very fluid... it keeps going... very easy to read, I must say. Very nice. How funny, in only one chapter, I know the personalities of so many characters! You do that so well! (I seriously need to work on my character development :P) Please continue!! |
| Jenn-chan aka KristinaToffl... 2003-11-14 ch 1, | yo! great stuff! i want to know more! keep it going! |
| Sweet-Steffie 2003-11-14 ch 1, | Aww, that was sweet. I almost cried. Kepp up the good work. |