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| The White Rose 2003-11-15 ch 1,   | It's a good short story. But when you keep putting "doctor" in quotes, it tells the reader that something is wrong. It takes away from the story because it's not such a surprise when 'something went wrong with the device'. That's just my opinion, if you care about it anymore, whoever you are. |