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| anonymous 2004-03-15 ch 1, anon. | abuseReally, really good. Freakishly scary, and good. It is kind of rushed, but I like it. |
| katpixie666 2004-02-22 ch 1,  | abusevery well wriiten and exquisitly fab :) keep @ it! tis gud gud *lol* ~Pixie~ |
| Cindy Moon 2004-01-22 ch 1, | abuseIt's incredible how works of writing can have the same title but have different contents. ^^ Nice twisted ending you've conjured up. I took a liking to this story. I can see(I'm not being biased here, really!) that you are a very good writing. You have great technique, your diction is excellent(not to mention some kick ** imagery), and your work doesn't give the feeling that it's forced. Great job! -appluads- -Cindy Moon *) |
| Lirael Goldenhand 2004-01-22 ch 1, | abuseEk that's disturbing! Heh, I predicted something along the lines of "rather later as opposed to right after," but I thought it would go one a bit longer! Cool! And evil...heh... |
| Celestial Sailor 2003-11-21 ch 1, | abuseHmm... mysterious and shrouded in illusion, no? I clung to the last words of the story, genuinely amazed and filled with wonder. Not that I imply to be mean, but it left me slightly in the dark, the ending came too abrupt and left too many questions of the characters. You can take this as either a compliment or insult but you have a unique writing style which I see you have developed over a long period of time or thorough practice. Forty years after that date... indeed... |
| rootin4philly 2003-11-16 ch 1, | abuseYOU MADE ME SIGN IN! Oh well... I really loved the sentence that talks about the insense and the brain cells dying. It describes me near perfume. I'm a little confused though. At the end Risa said fourty years, but the oracle didn't say 40 years. I supposed you wanted to confuse me... It's really well writen. Keep writing! |
| AnyaAnanda 2003-11-15 ch 1, | abuseWOW! that was really good! the suspense was soo well worked! I was sitting on the edge of my seat (and that is hard to do with the chair that i am sitting on!). What an awesome beginning! I love how you didn't just have her fall in love with him after she bumped into him. Yeah! awesome job, keep writing! |