Well another review for another one of your stories. I really did not like this one. The way you put the action as it was happening or going to happen whatever you were aiming for just lacks the rush a normal action scene would play out in a story. It just isn't interesting and since this is all action it kind of seems pointless to read by your wording.

Hey, I thought that was pretty cool. I like the way you write you give me a feel to it and your descriptions were amazing. Great job! and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

By the way, could you check out my story, "Expensive Bounty". If you're really into a lot of action in a story I think you'll like it. I must warn you of some of the gore. heh, anyway thanks!

he who shows No Mercy

Did I read right? Did your summary say that there won’t be second chapter? Nuts!

It was violent, very good, but violent. I’m rather sad that there won’t be a second chapter.

*0.o;; Does your fics always hav to be so violent?

Looks like SOMEONE'S been gaining more volcabulary, eh?

Nice start, a lotta action...

I'd say a continuation would be good!