I would reconsider the punctuation in this poem. If you re-arranged the lines you would have a much more dramatic effect. It's a very nice piece.

somthing the same, but in a different way. vary real. holding your breath while you read.

whoa, that was so awesome! I loved it. Very suspenceful (if that's a word) and mysterious.

Wonderful poem!
Like the end!
this poem is going on favorite list!

Yes, so very true. Very rhythmic and nice. Rather eerie. I like it.