What a nice poetic break. Refreshing and true to the other chapters in tone.

Wickly beautiful, and eloquently worded.

Darkly erotic. Nicely done. A hot little read ^_-.
vturnip~lostlucidity~mylildreams~lenci~commune forum.

"Screams of the breeze entertwine with your wings of a gentle calamity built with enchanted things."
How on earth did you do that. "screams of the breeze" - awesome personification. "enterwine with your wings" - lovely imagery. "gentle calamity" - godawesome contradiction. That line alone classifies as top grade poetry.
"Melodic tunes of my hate" - I don't think hate has ever been described that way - it was shocking, and fully wonderful.
"A cobra has glorified my silhouette for your black fangs to sink into my neck." - My god. Wow. ::is in awe:: That was top-grade imagery.
Gee, why am I reviewing in such a way. -__- I doubt my mind is fully functioning.
Brilliant - that is a masterpiece. I simply loved it.

~Shadafakup

I haven't been in fp in a ** long time, so sorry I didn't even notice your email change. Ah my god. I suck.
Wow. Like. W O W. *takes a deep breath*
I don't know hun, I have forgotten how to give proper reviews. I love this - its just awesome, beautiful, dark, and so delightfully erotic even with all the twisted images in this.
And the vocab - that was absolutely well handled.
I damn right don't know how to deal with this. Its power, its attraction was so deadly I was simply absorbed.
No words now, so it'll probably be better if I shut up and left your works untainted by lousy reviews like such.

~Shadafakup

This was NOT short and retarded, and it's ** beautiful. I don't think it's fair how you can write such things and then tell me that you're jealous of MY writing!! Say that once more and I shall smite thee, and you will NOT like it.
Good job.
(>*.*)> Evil Kirby.

your poetry, especially this series, is so lucious!! So poetic. My crap is usually too literal. You are so much better than me, even your stories!
missing you, worrying about you
but awaiting your contact
I will always be here for you
my good really does outwiegh my bad
but i understand all too well
i have made amends
yor mentor thanks you for giving so much more than receiving, I can never forget you and will always think of you in the best of terms because you are too good to be true!
ask of me what you will, yor wish is my command.
straight up reviews from now on, i promise

I just KNEW something powerful was coming. I am so in awe of your creativity here. It speaks so deeply, you use words so well here! I love all the imagry and the use of language is truly poetic! This is a bit darker, more sad than sensual. So evacotive, provacative, or convacative or some damn thing. I hope you wil contiue to post your works. You are an amazing soul. I love you, my dark but BRIGHT kindred spirit ::cuddles::

** girl, my day's been gunned down by some majour assed ** and this isn't wahat i needed right now. i love this, i've been putting together short stories on the Satnaic register and this reminded me of that, this imagary, the blood in the crib, i'm crying because this day is the worst, i'm sorry i wrote this in a review but i need help, please, get in touch ASAP
Kenzie

Oh wow. Beautifully chilling and dark. Amazing imagery, unique word choices. I loved this because it showed the evil- sin- and still how it felt so good. Excellent.

Since this starting anew, you've changed your words from those of love to those of resentment. The language is still beautiful. You are one of the most sensuous people I know and of course I beg of the obvious: more.

The rhymes of this break fit perfectly into this.

This is certainly different than your first. I've read it over a couple of times. I'm feeling an evolution-type wave come over me. Sin 2 marks a move forward for you. It tells of your changing, but still in the same sensuous manner.

This is sensuously delightful. Your true self shines through the words and emotions. You are a beautiful soul.

wow! john recommended you (seekeroftheway...or summit like that anyhow!) and he was right! totally right!
this is incredible, i love the dark and very sensual mood that it puts one in! incredible! genious!
the imagry is awe-inspiring, ive never read anything like it before! ::shocked gushingness::
rozie x