good. i like muchly. But, I'm not sure a sequel would be wise, seeing as it's going to be just him and her, her learning to deal with a human, namely him, and him learning to mindspeak and steal. and the drakes and dragon just kind of in the background.

good story. you are a good writer, Amarys (Lia?Liamarys?)

:) CD

awa, that's so cute... they ki-issed, yeah, they ki-issed! goos story :-) you should add more to it :-)

I know what you are thinking...not that Chief guy...he writes long boring reviews about spelling errors! Well there are a few (but I think most are letters left out) but I am here to heap on the praise!
I really like this story. The thoughts and colors and emotions...good stuff.
Write more, write often
Chief

Good story! Longer would have been nice, but oh well...
Love in Christ

whoo hoo! finally we're gonna see a dragon... yeah buddy... i really like the way you put your words together through out this peiece.. it's very lyrical.. sorry random thought.. but i like it

aww its ending already? how sad.. oh well.. still can't wait to see how it finishes...

Really good! Please write more!

This is good. Got some excellent description and good word choices. I'd review more but I got to go. Its good enough to have me put it on my favorites though!

Cool! Well it seems I reviewed chapter Two last time so this review of chapter two will be under the guise of a chapter one review! lol

Ok I usually give a detailed review. Do not be upset by anything I coment on or corrections...I like the story and notice things. Here goes.

Spelling: "...over the duns." (probably meant dunes)

"...she scrutinized the other face, and barely concerned the cleverly cut slab..." (I believe you were going for concealed but it will still not make sence in this sentance...Maybe.."barely noticed the cleverly concealed cut slab..")

"...she would not practice the desert's aw..." (aw is law?)

"...had mad up.." (made?)

"...Sarai furze (froze?), relying in he(the or her?) clothing..."

there is a 'tow' which needs to be 'two'

I think you may need commas on both sides of 'belatedly'

"...because m(my) sister..."

"...Hi siter(His sister?) was surprised..."

the only other comment I have is the last two paragraphs..."Tall, too tall for.." The whole paragraph needs more detail. The detail in it is confusing and vague. "She also knew that some sections of dark hair, heavy and thick, would be just begining to lance in the morning breeze." ? I just mean that your story was very articulate and discriptive until the end and the last paragraph left me with a confused vision.

Anyway good story! I like the ~thought talking!!~ Just remember use them consistantly just like a quote mark for talking.

Chief. PS~I finished Brigand Road~

~please read~

Write more. Write often

That was great, but you seemed to have repeated the firat chapter in the second and there were a few typos.

but otherwise it was great i escpecially liked the descriptions of the desert.

write more and update soon!

Hi. I liked the first chapter...but it seems that the second is a copy of the first...maybe it was uploaded instead?

Well upload the next one and I will read it

write more...write often

Chief

Great work. Very good description. The only problem that I noticed was spelling on a few words here and there. Other than that... nothing. Please continue with this story I'm looking forward to reading more.

hm... i like says george... intruiguing so far.. the images of the desert and the family are very vivid.. hope to see more...