Wow, I LOVED the ending! It was very intense, graphic, and emotional; just the way I like it. Couple of things I noticed though...
First of all, you didn't introduce "Mighty Eminent Man" at all... he just showed up by name as if he already had been. If I had written this, I would have explained who he was and then went on to describe what he did. The other thing I wondered about was how broken up the first paragraph was. You had a lot of "..."'s and not a whole lot of complete sentences. Was this intentional? You could do that if you wanted to make it a sort of foggy recollection or something that was hard to produce words for (i.e. the narrator wasn't coherent and was having a hard time phrasing feelings, or had too much of a headache or whatever to speak in complete sentences.) If that's not what you were trying to do though, you might consider revising that section though.
Overall, I liked it. I think it has the potential to be continued. I would love to learn more about the background of the girl who narrated it as well.