Great job for your first piece. Keep up the awesome work. Thanks for the review.

For one of your first attempts, this is really good.


~Heart of the Sword

Very good, liked the last stanza, extremely powerful.

*faves*

"The serpent's head was smashed
The holy cross was raised"

Good to see that antiquated prejudices are still in place today, though I somehow doubt you quite grasp the significance of the symbolism you used. It escapes many who embrace it.

Simplistic poem. Neither unique nor inventive, and thus not particularly memorable, either.

so, so true: i just feel sry that half the world as we know it goes: Jesus who? Real sad, how peple wont rely on him. Anyway (sry, i just got back frum church and feel the need to do something truly meanigful in life). But, hey, im done.