ah, sleep-deprived insanity... one of the many mental illnesses i've had the misfortune to suffer :s and i'm still sixteen. sigh. neway, great piece

I like this one, although I don't think it is the one I was suppose to be looking for on dreams.

hm...nice poem...interesting

Nicely done on this poem. Ah, insomnia... can't live with it, can't live without it because it NEVER GOES AWAY.

I like the style you wrote this in. It's unique, and kind of gives the idea of broken thoughts like those while trying to fight off insomnia...

I can definitely relate to this. Except I'm not forty with eye bags the size of shipping chests, I'm seventeen.

Anyway, great poem.

Thanks for the reviews and compliments... they're greatly appreciated. *smile*

Very original. I like this.

The short lines really worked well in adding to the frustration of the mood of the poem.

This poem is really good. you can make people feel what this person is feeling. Keep it up!

*Jade*

i can relate to the horrors and depression of insomnia being plagued by it myself...i loved yer poem, it makes ya seem like yer not alone night when sleep evades you...thanx, and please keep up the great work

-wendy

I can't function without my eight hours of sleep everynight; I can't imagine being an insomniac. Or perhaps, now I can. I enjoyed the flow of rhythm in this poem and the descriptions chosen. 'Shipping chests' lolol Keep up the great work!

The One and Only

very nice work.

i can relate.

I can Identify with this poem, suffering from insomnia myself, good descriptions, I like the eye bags the size of shipping chests! lol

Ah, insomnia. Wonderfully described. I really like this poem.