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| Arn 2006-04-06 ch 2,  | abusewtf? 'monsieur'? What the {hell} does that word mean? hey is that french? I hate french. ok i'll shut up now. Just a tip: don't give obscure words that are in another language unless you tell the reader what it means... iwas confused in this chapter. Well kind of short...but I guess it's ok. So this is where it starts? Hmm good job on the beginning I guess. Only thing dont call the chapters 'Update #1' or 'Update #2'...'cause we all know they are updates, but try to be more original, like call them 'chapters' instead like everyone else does :( LOL sorry _Conquest_ |
| Arn 2005-11-07 ch 1, | abuseum...what to say? Hmm...SHORT. Yeah. VERY SHORT. Not saying whether thats good or bad, though. Figure it out. I'm trying to post a good review here! :) Uh...very FULL OF MEANING. Seriosly. First simile, I liked it. It's just my view, though. I guess...the word to use for this would be...pithy or reticent or even succint. If you don't know what those words mean, well...look it up. Seriously. PITHY=brief and full of meaning. That's your writing style. NOT mine. I wish mine was full of meaning though that would be awesome ;) RETICENT=reserved; using few words. At a time like this, I'd say this chapter is symbolic of this. Awesome. SUCCINCT=hope you know this. Sort of like pithy, except means brief and clear. Awesome, everything is so perceptive and not obscure. That's what I like about your writing style. -Hoping to hell that this is a good review, LOL!-If you liked this review please post one on one of my stories. |
| Tzotel431 2005-08-15 ch 2, | abuseo, I like it. keep writting i'm interested in this story. Keep it up! Tzotel |
| Tzotel431 2005-08-15 ch 1, | abuseSo this is kinda like a prologue? It intirgues me. I'll read more. Good job. Tzotel |
| Analis Destiny 2004-08-20 ch 1, | abuseI like this, it intrigues me. Please update soon! Is it set in ancient times? I hope to get more of the story. Thank you so much for the reviews! It just made my day! Sorry about ending it so soon, I have a habit of never ending things, so i just had to end it. I'm thinking about redoing it though, if your interested. |
| yuna-chan 2003-11-22 ch 1, | abuseHm interesting, I wanna know what happens next! keep up the good work Yuna_Chan |