good story but didnt you ever watch those crime shows where they find some kind of print somewhere on the person like his blood on her nails?she did dig into the back of his neck so they should have got the sample and suspected him whatever either way right or wrong dumb or insane-i meant me there lol- i liked it

Oh, how coincidental... it's almost as if they're the same person... lol. For a short story, this is really good. Kinda reminds me of my own writing style I guess. It was nice you focused on things like what she was wearing rather than just writing out the plot, it really made the story into a good story rather than a story that didn't mean much.
-Keilah

why do I get the feeling Davies is involved somehow... interesting plot, update soon.
Pls have a look at my story.
HeavenLeigh xx

dark, morbid, and sick, but incredibly well written - and i give you extra kudos for managing to pull all four attributes off in the same story.
the build-up is great, the simple, elegant leading the reader along ever-so-slightly; you tell the story with enough subtlety that the reader really doesn't know why they're even reading it, then stops at the end . . . thinks . . . and suddenly, it /clicks/. and that satisfaction is enough to make that reader thoroughly enjoy the story.
great job on showing and not telling. keep up the fantastic work.

Hey! All I can say is...WOW! Great writing.
Thanks for reviewing...I wasn't worried about lOvErcHicK20o0...I already left her a little note of my own *evil grin*.
Anyway, thanks again for reviewing, the next chapter should be up tonight or tomorrow afternoon!
~Ave
"Trapped in a box"

OOh... this story so goes with the music playing right now. Its kinda cool *grins* anyway, interesting twist right there, plan on updating anytime? Great job