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poetic abortion
2005-01-18
ch 1,
abuseReally sad and well exressed. Keep up the good work !!

~* Noelle *~
Galadh Niniel
2005-01-15
ch 1,
abuseSad and really well-expressed. Good poem.
Zainab
2004-08-24
ch 1,
abusei like how you put glittering in that last line.
luckily, this has not happened to me.
PheonixSlayer
2004-02-16
ch 1,
abusecool. i'm usually not partialto haikus but i liked this one.
shredmyties
2004-01-13
ch 1,
abusehmm...its very nice
but perhaps a thought should be contained within one line?
just a thought :D
it's lovely~
Lidless Eye
2004-01-04
ch 1,
abuseWow! This was REALLY good... one of the best tankas I've read in a long time... Magnificent job!
~Lidless Eye
frugale
2003-12-22
ch 1,
abuseThat's special. I loved it.
Celestial Sailor
2003-12-02
ch 1,
abuseI noticed many people commented on the length, well, if they didn't notice it happens to be a Japanese poem - a haiku. Sarah.. that's a nice name.
I have been interested in Chinese culture from a young age, and influenced by the language and it's people in a very positive way. Something seems to allur me to talented writers, they have clever and inventive pennames that whisper a song to you, and allur you.
I like your poem for its profound, yet subtle effect of drawing us in, paying us, and leaving us with the slight feeling of mystery and sorrow. I am not Christian myself, but find enlightenment in your faith and spirituality, for a lot can be learned nonetheless. I'm assuming you are from mainland China.. perhaps Shanghai or Beijing, no?
I would love to see some more of your work in the near future and will try my best to review some more if possible.
-Celestial Sailor (Matt Di Agastini.. yes, I'm Italian.)
godawful teen-angst poetry
2003-12-01
ch 1,
abuse"but all I really knew in/truth were lies"
That has to be my favorite part; the contrast is perfectly placed. A very nice piece, hopefully fiction (I've been lied to before; not a fun experience). Sorry it's taken me so long to read more of your stuff...school, etc.
~lyv
Werecat99
2003-11-29
ch 1,
abuseBitter, but then again passing the emotion through so few words shows real talent. Good work.
PainKiller
2003-11-25
ch 1,
abuse*sigh* Simply wonderful; nice wording selection with 'glittering facade'. By the way, 'facade' is my all-time favorite word (yes, I have a favorite word; go figure). Wonderful work.
The Black Rider
2003-11-24
ch 1,
abuseShort but extremely passionate and emotional. Great job.
Mime
2003-11-23
ch 1,
abuseI second what BVR said. ^.^
Lady B.V Rose
2003-11-23
ch 1,
abuseI agree with everyone else here about this, and I also wanna say that this is beautiful! ^__^, its sad, but I bask in the glory of sad...^_~

- BVR xx
Taka and Keichirou
2003-11-23
ch 1,
abuseexcellent...this is very good...very powerful...
T
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