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| poetic abortion 2005-01-18 ch 1,  | abuseReally sad and well exressed. Keep up the good work !! ~* Noelle *~ |
| Galadh Niniel 2005-01-15 ch 1, | abuseSad and really well-expressed. Good poem. |
| Zainab 2004-08-24 ch 1, | abusei like how you put glittering in that last line. luckily, this has not happened to me. |
| PheonixSlayer 2004-02-16 ch 1, | abusecool. i'm usually not partialto haikus but i liked this one. |
| shredmyties 2004-01-13 ch 1, | abusehmm...its very nice but perhaps a thought should be contained within one line? just a thought :D it's lovely~ |
| Lidless Eye 2004-01-04 ch 1, | abuseWow! This was REALLY good... one of the best tankas I've read in a long time... Magnificent job! ~Lidless Eye |
| frugale 2003-12-22 ch 1, | abuseThat's special. I loved it. |
| Celestial Sailor 2003-12-02 ch 1, | abuseI noticed many people commented on the length, well, if they didn't notice it happens to be a Japanese poem - a haiku. Sarah.. that's a nice name. I have been interested in Chinese culture from a young age, and influenced by the language and it's people in a very positive way. Something seems to allur me to talented writers, they have clever and inventive pennames that whisper a song to you, and allur you. I like your poem for its profound, yet subtle effect of drawing us in, paying us, and leaving us with the slight feeling of mystery and sorrow. I am not Christian myself, but find enlightenment in your faith and spirituality, for a lot can be learned nonetheless. I'm assuming you are from mainland China.. perhaps Shanghai or Beijing, no? I would love to see some more of your work in the near future and will try my best to review some more if possible. -Celestial Sailor (Matt Di Agastini.. yes, I'm Italian.) |
| godawful teen-angst poetry 2003-12-01 ch 1, | abuse"but all I really knew in/truth were lies" That has to be my favorite part; the contrast is perfectly placed. A very nice piece, hopefully fiction (I've been lied to before; not a fun experience). Sorry it's taken me so long to read more of your stuff...school, etc. ~lyv |
| Werecat99 2003-11-29 ch 1, | abuseBitter, but then again passing the emotion through so few words shows real talent. Good work. |
| PainKiller 2003-11-25 ch 1, | abuse*sigh* Simply wonderful; nice wording selection with 'glittering facade'. By the way, 'facade' is my all-time favorite word (yes, I have a favorite word; go figure). Wonderful work. |
| The Black Rider 2003-11-24 ch 1, | abuseShort but extremely passionate and emotional. Great job. |
| Mime 2003-11-23 ch 1, | abuseI second what BVR said. ^.^ |
| Lady B.V Rose 2003-11-23 ch 1, | abuseI agree with everyone else here about this, and I also wanna say that this is beautiful! ^__^, its sad, but I bask in the glory of sad...^_~ - BVR xx |
| Taka and Keichirou 2003-11-23 ch 1, | abuseexcellent...this is very good...very powerful... T |