* Five stars! Good start for a series, if you want. Pretty good standalone, too. Good all around, actually. ^-^

what a nice short story :O) good job.

Whoah, nice! I loved the ending! That could make an awesome short movie. Keep it up!

Well I like this storry
but I don't understand the end :-(
please write more
Beppo
Bonn, Germany

Well I like this storry
but I don't understand the end :-(
please write more
Beppo
Bonn, Germany

Very good. Two thumbs up.

That was nicely written. I wish it were longer though. You are very talented at writing!
*^Witch Goddess^*