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missraggamuffin
2008-06-07
ch 46,
abuseoh crack! the romance kills! their emotions makes me toes curl. i definitely love the ending *heart* i do hope this has a sequel tho... haha xD i'd love to see more of tarya & tyzlan :)

it's a bit rushed tho, after the part where he says he won the war
but what came after was oozing of niceness xD i love love the mistress part. 40+ chapters of waiting really paid off. congrats in finishing this :D
24-7reader
2008-05-21
ch 46, anon.
abuseYAY i loved your story, but not the ending where tarya leaves with pip. she belongs to tyzlan and him only.
loved it!
Autumn Maiden
2008-05-16
ch 46,
abuseI want ta thank u for finsihing the story...i have been waiting for so long for the ending and when i saw that it had been updated and finshed i must say i practically fell of my chair...it is an excellent story although i must admit i have a bit of a soft spot for stories of thieves hahaha and handsome kings.well all in all a wonderfull read.thanxz u for writing it and now finsihing it...
Kaybookworm
2008-05-03
ch 49,
abuseW-O-W! I love this story! I really loved how the beginning the King wasn't the nicest then when he gets his memry back he's different. I was so glad when Tarya finally agreed to marry Dean/Tyzlan. Your story is one of my very favorites. See Ya!
Mursal
2008-04-29
ch 49,
abuseOne of the best, well-rounded and well written pieces I have ever read on FP. And I'm not exaggerating.

However, I can't help but feel you rushed it slightly towards the end; I was so happy that you kept at the pace the story needed to be at, ignoring the idiotic suggestions to speed things up, to get the most out of the storylines and characters. But you really did break that in the last wo chapters It was a shame.

Nevertheless, KUDOS!
naivete chica
2008-04-29
ch 48,
abuseI read this story from start to finish in two nights. Couldn't put it down. ^^ I loved you storyline, it's so original and like nothing I've read before. I would have loved more chemistry between Tarya and Tyzlan/Dean. At the very start you suggested that he often bedded women, so I would have expected him to lust after Tarya. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your story! You must keep writing.
a reader
2008-04-26
ch 1, anon.
abuseI usually don't review stories but I did want to compliment you on your style.
"Silver pensas and gold innaks spilled out and began an ominous dance on the paved ground"
excellent imagery. I hope the rest of the story lives up to it.
Crystal
2008-04-20
ch 48, anon.
abuseGreat ending! I think this one really sealed the whole deal, it really resolved everything. You are the master of re-writes! Bravo!

Oh yeah, and that gag Epilogue was great too. Awesome story!
Crystal
2008-04-20
ch 47, anon.
abuseI really like this re-write a lot. It doesn't feel rushed at all, like the last one. Though I liked the first one too; This one just has more of a progression then the first draft. I can't wait to read the next re-write!
Arsenel
2008-04-16
ch 49,
abuseLol,

well that was interesting - nice changes btw, though I have to admit i enjoyed the playful barter being the happy couple during the first version of the chapter, though the ball was nice.

The more in-depth look into the thoughts was also pretty cool, but it keep the same feel so nothing to really comment.

As for that last part, it was... interesting (tears off last couple of lines and throw into chimmey), really interesting - glad it didn't happen :)

anyhow, nice additions

cherrios
liminalzest
2008-04-16
ch 49,
abusehahaha, thank you for that alternate ending! :D

the re-write definitely improves the story! here's another point you might want to consider for future re-writes. given that tarya was estranged from her mother when she was a little girl, she might not remember how her mother (or father) look unless she has a photograph of them. mental images usually get blurry after years.

Claps for the wonderful story...
Niwatori Vori
2008-04-15
ch 49,
abuseIt's better!

I don't like the second ending where Tarya runs off with Pip. I think after all the things Tyzlan and Taya went through, they would be a better match.

Yummy bird stew! *looks in the pot* Nevermind. I'll just have mashed potatoes.
princessmili
2008-04-15
ch 48,
abuselol, that pip and tarya ending was, uh, not my to my liking
but loved the end of getting taz and tar together, wonderful... congrads on finishing (sniffs, everyone but me seems to have finished their story) and this ending was better
Arsenel
2008-04-13
ch 48,
abuseHey,

Don't know if one more review will matter or not, especially after 300+... wow.

Well all I really want to say that this was bloody-brilliant (or if your American - really good... I think that is as close of a translation anyway).

Read from start to finish and you had my emotions rolling with the story throughout - betrayal, love, loss, happiness, friendship, etc.

A really great story - thank you for it.

Cherrio (laters)
Crystal
2008-04-12
ch 48, anon.
abuseThat was rough, but it's the sort of ending I expected. It was good nevertheless. But did Tarya's hair grow back in the end?

Great story, I loved it! :)
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