I like this; I'm a horselover and my all time fav. books are Elyane Mitchell's 'Silver Brumby' books, which come hghyl recommended to everyone that likes the idea of horses running free. Beyond that - I think this could be expanded quite nicely into the mare's story, how she got there and what happened next if you want to. I find the last line, broekn away from the others very effective - its good.

hey i like this story is it a one shot? i hope not its pretty good, in one of your reviews you mentioned that you liked wolves if so you should read (and review, lol) my poem Wolf i like it so i am just passing the word!