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| Dame Mage 2008-03-19 ch 9,  | abuseThis is a little random... all the same i hope you update. |
| Kohlomere 2008-03-05 ch 9, | abuseWhoops but all's well that ends well. Great job, E. |
| Skyway Avenue 2008-03-04 ch 9, | abuseEw. The part with Chris and Jessica makes me sick. >.< Oh well, I guess it could be worse, you could put tentacles into some sexual scenario. *shivers* |
| KatyLee 2007-11-24 ch 1, anon. | abusewhen a person talks, and the sentence continues, (IE "She's lying to you," Zeta said sarcastically) then you use a comma, when it stops, (IE "I like pie." "So do I!") You use a period because the sentence is completely stopping. Just a note. You also have a lot of grammatical errors and typos in your story. If you re-wrote this I suppose you should have paid better attention to grammar. |
| Polka Panda Rockstar 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseRight after Melissa says "You have been here for over a year and yet you have not figured how not to get one kid injured at least once a day" -- This picture popped into my head of some kids sitting in a circle with my old gym teacher standing at the center and saying "Okay, kids, today we're going to meditate." -- and then one kid just faints. It made me laugh. I have an odd imagination. And an awkward sense of humor. By the way, what Melissa said was a big run-on sentence. Just thought I'd point that out. Overall, I like this story though. It's different from anything I've read on FictionPress so far. Good work! Anyway, I'll be reading. |
| Luv and Peace 2007-10-12 ch 3, | abuseO... More! Update soon! |
| Luv and Peace 2007-10-12 ch 2, | abuseLol! Procrastination! I really liked the shower part. Lol. |
| noriepie 2007-10-07 ch 2, | abusehey this is a new situation but don't u think they sound kind of childish to be 20something teachers? |
| Luv and Peace 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseHey! Awesome to see this story back and I can't wait to read this rewrite. It seems interesting, update soon! |
| Always Lost In A Book 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abusehey can you send me the original too? thanxx! |
| Shindo Shuichi 2007-10-04 ch 1, | abuseLmfaoo! Could you send me the original plxx? My email address for hotmail is... shindoxxshuichi (at) hotmail (dot) com Thank you so much! And I totally love this story atm! :D |
| Innocent Desires 2007-03-03 ch 22, | abuseOh my god, how nice it's progressing! Do continue! |
| Turdlock 2007-02-03 ch 22, | abuseChris is probably my favorite person ever. lol. He's really funny, and I want a teacher like him... maybe. Poor Brock, I just knew something like that was going to happen. I hope you haven't given up on this story, it's really good. :D |
| LittleLimerick83 2007-01-25 ch 22, | abuseWow, it's been a while since I read this story. I actually had to go back and reread everything to refresh my memory, and I remembered then how much I liked it. Anyway, I really hope you don't forget about this one. The plot is finally thickening. You're doing a great job with it! Keep it up! and if you ever have time, feel free to check out my stuff. |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-10-05 ch 22, | abuseA very interesting developemnt. Also, Go Tofuno! |