Okay, I see this is a prequel to the other story of yours. You might like a historical story I did, Triumvirate and Entente.

Hola Marcussun!

Sorry for my long absence... I think I've experienced the author's version of a character death. Either way, I'm back!

...And I'm off to go see crusader. I didn't think this one was /terrible/, but *shrug*. Can't wait to check out the next one!

~Ponteh out.

Um... ha. ha. Hilarious. You have an even better sense of humor than me. I, at least know not to joke about death. If you hadn't just posted the 30th on Warzone, I could've fallen for it. Or of course, it could have given me a newfound belief in ghosts if you hadn't done the 'ha ha' at te end. A belief in lazy ghosts who complain about overwork at school to get out of RPing and updating fics. (HA-ha) Another pretty good chapter though.

No, he didn't seem evil, just too... loyal to the king's laws. The opposite of Robin Hood. Both good men, but one could not escape the law. Little bit of advice though: next time you have someone telling the story of their fight, do it as if they were experiencing it. You method was novel and creative, but after the novelty wears off I think it would be too cumbersome and hard to convey emotion in. I could be wrong, but that's what I think.

Wraith

Hm... something about how Matthew, Anne, and HaiFung acted seemed off, but I'm not sure how. Good though.

Wraith

Ah, I love blacksmiths. On one RPG I'm on (not any I'm on w/ you) I have two or three of them. But I digress. Good, write more, add Walker. I really do think that Walker (especially as a Walker) would really mesh well with this story.

Wraith

Wraith

A bit melodramatic, yes, but good. Uh... are Liam and/or Rionai vegetarians? Or usually vegetarians? What was that little divergence on meat about?

Wraith

Ow. Cruelty to stupid guards. ((shakes head)) No one deserves that. Good, but I did notice one thing: I don't know much about Nottingham (read: I know nothing about it) but it doesn't make sense for it to have fortress-like walls. Then wonderful, honorable thieves wouldn't've been able to get in as easily.

Wraith

Good, and did I mention that I really like the characters? Especially the knife girl, Riona or whatever. I've always liked creating characters like that, even though I hate them in videogames.

Wraith

I'm still clueless, but very good writing. Keep it up.

Wraith

I'm not sure what this is, but a) two things and b) it sounds interesting. First, how and why would an Athenian and Spartan be working together? They hated each other. (the Athenians and Spartans). And second, my character suggestion: Walker, in the old man form I mentioned in his Warzone app. The one with the memorable blue eyes but without the scars. For data on Walker, you can use Warzone and the Citadel. You do have the Citadel's url already, right?

Walker/Wraith/Techy El Nerd

Good, buts where's my character?

I'd like to post my review and later on, I will send e-mail to you for new characters. your story is good. You make the readers could participate in the story (reader's character). btw, where is the Mask of evil and silmarillion located. review my story too, the battle of britain which is located at the bottom of the page

You are rotten. Despite the good chapter. . . that was the terriblest thing anyone has ever done to me! AAH!
-Gamgee

mou! marcus-sun! that was not funny! it's not even april! ;_;
good move! heheehe, i can't wait~~ update more please!
~ponteh