my name is luka
i live on the second floor
i live upstairs from you
yes i think you've seen me before

if you hear something late at night
some kind of troublesome kind of fight
just dont ask me what it was
just dont ask me what it was
just dont ask me what it was

you should update this.
because this song is the best song in the world.
and i really enjoy reading a story too it...
lol
=]

i think that this is a very impressive write. it has a unique style and a strong voice. its very high in the quality of the content. good job.
i hope you will take some time to review some of my work as well.

Luka sounds more like a Puerto Rican girl's name. There aren't many Puerto Ricans in hick states like Wisconsin. The dad yelling at the kid in Spanish would be great, too.

*looks at Eriko hungrily* (is that even a word... hungrly?... and if so did i spell it right?) I should just eat you now, it is just like you to begin a new story and froget the others... but writer's block is writer's block and susposedly it stinks... wouldn't know, i am no writer... Right okay then, SO... more little boys (Falkon's) for older girls to act like a sister too (Eriko) hmm... same plot linish... okay i am gonna shut up now because you are probably gonna yell at me next time we are on at the same time... shutting up now... right well... ill have to re-send you chapter two to review... okie dokie then... Later Eri... Oh, and Hisoki wants me to say 'Hi' and stuff... okay... 'Secrets' *wacks Xel away from the key board' down you purple goon... Tell Fal i say 'Hi'... ya know wut i might as well just e-mail ur sry butt... hmm... too tired... *falls asleep*
-=Ends Review of Chapter Two=- (Tehe... ya like it will really make it bold... just use your imagination... we all know you have one of those... How is Jack and Will... still in the same bed?)