Aw, that is so nice! Makes me think of an innocent child's prayer. Not complicated, not screwed up by the way everyone keep's messing with religion nowadays, just an exchange of love and gratitude between Creator and Creation. Great!

beautiful! it makes me feel all happy inside, and, as i usually feel when i read something this lovely, it reaffirms my faith in God and all his wonder :)

I think this is really sweet, and very good for a first poem! The first line in the second verse, though, I assume 'plash' should be 'splash'? It doesn't matter all that much. But anyway, great poem, keep it up!Blessed be from Learah!

Hey Seaspray! It's really me, Vané Alasse from fanfiction.net, but I'm on this site under the name Joyce Reid.
This is an adorable poem. :) It's refreshing -- not a depressing, angsty sort in the slightest!
Aplauds!
~Joyce Reid

Oh, that's very sweet. It's like a child's prayer.

nice poem, you're very visual.

A lovely little poem, touching in its childlike simplicity and trust. Simply lovely.

i like the rhyming in this poem. nice job! =)

good writing, you used great words and structure, it really makes it have more meaning the way u wrote it

First poem??!! WoW! That is great. Now I'm going to go out side. Makes you appreciate the smaller things in life. Very well done.

This poem makes me wish I got out more often. I especially like the first stanza, with "the soft wings of a dove." The elements there really blend together to form a picturesque mosaic. Nicely done.

Another very nice piece. It has an elegance to it, an elegance that I shall attempt to master one day. But not right now. In any case, this is a really cool little poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for the review and feel free to drop by my site anytime and check out more of my work. You might like "Desire" or "Hope." In any case, take care and keep writing, you certainly have talent!

The rhyming was effortless and smooth. Great job!
~Faith, Hope and Love

Great poem. I really like the first stanza!
*lime-girl*

Oh WOW. This is so cute. Aww...reminds me of when I was ickle. You have to keep writing.
Trins x