This is one of those stories in which you do need wacko paragraphing. It reads nicely, but I would like to see a) more commas and b) more spacing.

seriously freaky...cud almost believe this was true :-S Excellent job...keep it up. seriously i need to work out my obsession with the three full stops...newa, lol
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Creepy. VERY Creepy. Sounds almost true! Great Job!

Crazy story, but I kind of like it. Ranting people are freaky.

i'd hate to see your mind. really. goodwriting, excellent writing, but..damn. get therapy, i tell you! please?